Wednesday, 13 April 2016

My story cubes post


It's was a dark stormy night and the plane started to go down I got a parashot and I jumped out of the plane. I landed in the water and there was a massive splash.

A Turtle came and saved me and when I got on shore I started to walk. I found a camp site. The next 
day it was a sunny day after that tiable night on a plane then a rainbow appeared.  

Dscription:I went to ebonys class for the day and she gave me story cubes to use I made a strong with you had to shak the box and use what cubes you ever got

Feedback/Feedforward: I like how put some cool sentence in it. But you could maybe read over it again and see if there are any mistakes. Jake

Evaluation:I think I need to read over more post and look at the mistake

This is what I learned from Hiwi the Kiwi

Hey unkell. Get a bigger sinker on the line because a. Bird could get on your line so get a bigger sinker and if u cache a big fish unkell put it back it might have babies so put it back for later for other people to cache the fish unkell u need to get a wet teal  to peak up the fish or if u don't it take a layer off the skin and the fish will get sick and die so it not good for the sea an when we went back to the beach I said to unkell lets go and peak up rubish on the shore then we went home with some Kai it was we yummy snapper and that's what we learned from Hiwi the Kiwi 

Sunday, 3 April 2016

Writing Portfolio Post

We read a story called ‘Licked’ by Paul Jennings. In our writers notebooks we wrote down any ideas that we could so we could write about it later. We chose ideas from here and wrote about them using the PIES Model (Persuade, Inform, Entertain, Self). This is the result that Troy helped me publish.

When pranks go wrong:
When I was trying to do a prank on my sister it went terribly wrong. It was my sisters birthday. She was turning 12. Mum had planned a party for her. It was going to be at our house and some of her friends were coming over. Now my sister has been annoying her whole life and this is gonna be payback for all the times she's been annoying to me. She's so bossy and thinks that she is the boss of everyone, except my Mum and Dad.
I thought of the perfect way to get her back. Mum had finished making her cake and it was a big one and it was coloured blue and had anime characters on it. I had just found a years supply of fireworks in my dad's closet. I thought it would be a great idea to put the two together!
I snuck into the kitchen and I stuff the cake full of firework and I tied them all together and let the line out. I put it next to the candle so no one would know.
When it was cake time my mum brought the cake out and the lighter and put it on the table. She lit the candle wick and we all started to sing "Happy Birthday...." this lit the wick to the fireworks and when we all got to the 'Inara' part of the song the cake exploded like a nuke going off. Everyone was covered in cake. Mum was as angry as a bull, so I ran for my life. 
Mum caught me and gave me the biggest hiding of my life. I'm not looking forward to my birthday because I know Inara will try and get me back.

I liked you're story it was really detailed but there was a bit of incorrect spelling but other than that i liked the story it was a good prank. Louis

I like how troy help me and I will try to do it by my self when I do this next time