It's was a dark stormy night and the plane started to go down I got a parashot and I jumped out of the plane. I landed in the water and there was a massive splash.
A Turtle came and saved me and when I got on shore I started to walk. I found a camp site. The next
day it was a sunny day after that tiable night on a plane then a rainbow appeared.
Feedback/Feedforward: I like how put some cool sentence in it. But you could maybe read over it again and see if there are any mistakes. Jake
Evaluation:I think I need to read over more post and look at the mistake